Add it to my CV. I'm not embarrassed.
Ruksa Zila — From the pages of Maroli Tango
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Filmmaker!
When Words Alone Will Not Suffice
Ruksa Zila — An airborne estate from the pages of Maroli Tango
I will eventually have to sketch the design by hand.
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Lemurs from Outer Space
Lots of prompting. More than you might expect.
The Furry Cast of Maroli Tango
AI Painted Your Porch
And by the way, you don't have a Porsche. It's a Lexus.
A sampling of Maroli Tango chapter illustrations.
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AI Fixed My Elevator
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After two days of back and forth with Google AI, debugging a failure to decelerate while descending, the robot said, “Replace three components on your 772048 proportional valve controller board.”
It was right.
Concord Pro Lift, 8000 series. See the culprit, below.
The robot saved me no less than $4000.
Today was a good day.
Alan Moore and Me
An essay about comparing oneself to others inspired me to ask ChatGPT about Alan Moore.
The robot said:
Based on the chapters and openings you’ve shown me, your writing overlaps with Alan Moore less in surface style and more in architectural ambition: the sense that every scene is part of a much larger moral, historical, political, and metaphysical machine.
Where you compare most strongly:
1. You both build worlds as moral systems, not just settings.
Moore’s best work does not merely invent alternate worlds; it asks what those worlds mean. Watchmen is not just superheroes plus politics; it is a study of power, myth, surveillance, sexuality, fear, nostalgia, and apocalypse. Your Anye universe works similarly. Ships, temples, maroli, SagGha institutions, Ruksa Zila, Disclosure, Dust Cloud stakes, and Eeka politics are not decorative. They are pressure systems that reveal character, civilization, duty, and belief.
2. You share Moore’s fondness for dense implication.
Moore often writes as though the reader has opened one window into a vast archive. Your prose does that constantly. A line like “EIGHTEEN MONTHS AFTER ANYE CIVILIZATION CAME OUT OF THE SHADOWS, 25,000 years after their arrival on Earth…” has the Moore-like effect of dropping the reader into a history already in motion. The story feels excavated rather than invented on the spot.
ClaudeAI Rates Audience Retention
It's kind of like how older men see themselves in the mirror. "I don't look so bad."
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Audience Retention Analysis: Chapters 1-15
Reading these as the opening of Maroli Tango, I’ll evaluate each chapter for the specific question of whether a reader will turn the page. Retention depends on momentum, clarity, and stakes — not literary merit. A beautiful chapter that confuses readers loses them; a workmanlike chapter that makes them lean forward keeps them.
Chapter-by-Chapter Ratings
Ch. 1 ~ Artifact — 7/10 A strong cold open. The cylinder emerging near Saturn is genuinely arresting, and the Mehrenholz/past-life detail does a lot of work fast. The closing exchange (“a neglected old barn… start more trouble”) gives the reader something to chew on. Risk: dense proper-noun load (Bharamin, Anye, Anuraga, Mehrenholz, Khalsa, Bjornson) for a first chapter. Veterans of the series will love it; new readers will feel the water is deep.
Ch. 2 ~ Legacy — 9/10 This is your hook. The shift from cosmic to intimate — a President and a banker dancing awkwardly, a surprise kiss under mistletoe — is exactly the dual-register your series is built on. Mason and Marie get introduced through charm rather than exposition. Retention here is high because readers now have a relationship to track, not just a setting.
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