Just tell me it’s fine …

A teaser from my massive edit on Quantum Soul, now halfway done.

Chapter 108

University Hospital Campus

Aja had barely enough time to change clothes before going to work, but she didn’t regret a last-minute tutorial on drone operation — the sightseeing tour between student housing and the hospital was worth the cost of admission.

Broadcast into her neural implant via RealSide Services, the augmented reality overlay upon night’s landscape was a revelation of sights rarely witnessed. The drone’s Soul-Camera-enhanced sense net revealed a myriad of details normally invisible to the natural eye — distorted space roiling beneath a grav-lift ambulance, heat blossoming through winter’s cold blanket into a dark sky, a wandering feline’s tiny soul, peeking out of bright green eyes.

The cat’s life force registered an index of 2, a diminutive number on an arbitrary scale about which even the inventors knew little, except to say that hers was 115, Vaga’s  119 and Amil’s 135.

She worried about bringing the drone into the hospital, but neither guard nor facility Oma objected to its credentials — the shift supervisor barely glanced up. “Everything’s quiet. You can go find a place to sleep. Or whatever.”

“I’ll cruise around for a while.”

The lady groaned into her chair. “All right.”

The hospice floor was asleep, monitors tracking life signs without incident — nothing happening, nothing expected to happen. Aja flinched at a feeling of discouragement — troubled by the ethics of seeking out death in order to interrogate its messenger.

Introspection came to a halt when the drone signed <AL> in the critical care wing. “This device sees an unassigned life force artifact.”

A formless cloud hovered in a hallway near the triage center. It bobbed there, slowly changing shape, drifting from one side to the other — as if respectful of walls that had, as far as she knew, no power over it.

It’s waiting for someone to die. She walked closer. “I can see you.” A counter flashed in a corner of her vision — the value well into four digits, changing too quickly to be read, but the visitor’s life force was certainly more energetic than any physical person’s — perhaps signifying as great a divide as that between her and the cat she’d just met.

The apparition didn’t seem to know she was there — Aja took a deep breath, walking into its shape, hoping nothing catastrophic would come of it. Her voice was thin, quivering, frightened. “Can you hear me?” And then she stepped back out, having neither heard nor felt anything in response.

It seemed to turn — perhaps a trick of perspective, or a rendering effect — but she thought, for just a second, that it might have noticed her. On the other side of a door, a life sign monitor chirped, loud enough to be heard by a sleeping attendant. Voices were raised in sorrow.

Tension drained out of her shoulders. “There’s your passenger.” The apparition shot away so quickly she couldn’t see what direction it went. She waited ten minutes — to be sure it wasn’t going to depart along the same route — and then rode a lift to the women’s dormitory on the fifth floor, to get whatever sleep she could.

Later on, in the early morning hours before sunrise, Aja Revata dreamed of angels.

Hammer and Tong

Now that storylines in Anye Legacy books 2 & 3 are in pretty good shape, it’s time to go back and apply writer’s craft. I’ve been away from Quantum Soul long enough to be objective, and I can see it needs some work.

This is always a dilemma for a writer – you fall in love with the details and end up writing material that, while it might be lovely, contains fundamental defects.

The pacing was off, there were too many details that readers probably won’t care about and some of it was boring.

So, I’m working on a new beginning, picking up the protagonist at age 17 instead of age 11. In order to focus on what I need to be doing, I made a short list.

  • Interiority of characters
  • Sense of place
  • Meaningful exposition
  • Interior dialogue
  • Advance the plot
  • So what

If you want to see what I’m setting aside, go here for a look at a sample of the most recent draft. What follows is the first 2 chapters of my current thought experiment. It’s early to be sharing this, and it still might not be any good, but I’m not shy. Comments welcome.

Continue reading “Hammer and Tong”

Found on the editing room floor …

… is a bit about an author who wanted to show off his mastery of craft by executing metaphor and irony in a single passage, so he wrote about his dog’s “cough syrup” eyes at dinnertime — meaning “expectorant” — but looked it up and learned it was the wrong usage.

Author’s note: Having just suffered a terrible bout of influenza, I believe I have a good excuse for this. Even so, if you find the gag vaguely amusing, please say so in the comments.

It would be a kindness, on account of I sure didn’t get any validation at home for it.

 

John’s Amazing Waffles

Serves 2

3/4 cup all purpose flour

1 tsp baking soda

1 tbs sugar

4 tbs Kraft vanilla malted milk powder

1/4 tsp salt

mix dry ingredients thoroughly, then add

1 egg, beaten

1/4 tsp vanilla extract

2 tbs melted butter

buttermilk (about 3/4 cup … add to desired consistency)

For best results,  let batter sit for 1 hour …

Whole milk mixed with sour cream, cottage cheese or yogurt may be substituted for buttermilk … Blend thoroughly before mixing with dry ingredients …

For extra fluffy waffles, separate egg white from yolk, beat egg white with sugar and fold into batter as last step of preparation.

When adding pecans or other nuts, put nuts on cooking surface BEFORE adding batter …

How to get to Laghu …

There are several routes, but it’s best to go by aircar.

(Cymbal crash)

I’m revisiting old posts for an email campaign. While loitering here, I replaced a first-draft map of the Anye home world Vidura with the final product.

Are you curious about my books? Science Fiction for grown-ups, and an adventure/love story, so far. You’ll my Amazon author page here.

Y’all come back.

Oh, no! Forty characters!

Yesterday, I posted a partial list of cast members in Resilient. I finished the section this morning.

The book has forty characters!

It made me groan with sorrowful anticipation. Somebody — another writer, a reader, a critic — is sure to complain, even lecture me about my ignorance of some fundamental rule that authors of fiction must adhere to regarding the size of one’s cast.

What does one do when faced with a dilemma of this gravity? Google it.

Whew. Jami Gold says I’m not a fool.

“A sweeping family epic needs a lot of characters to create the sense of scope.”

That’s a relief. Thanks, Jami!

Here’s the finished section. Continue reading “Oh, no! Forty characters!”

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