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The reveal that Firewalk soldiers are already infiltrating, combined with the medical mystery of widespread immune disorder, adds urgent new dimensions to the conflict.

The Setting

The pharmaceutical distributor’s office as front for an underground surgery is perfectly noir. The detail about the orthopedic shoe store next door grounds it in mundane reality while the steel doors and alley entrance signal darker purposes.

Medical Detective Work

Doc Deebra’s examination revealing:

• Malnourishment and bad teeth
• Poorly set broken bones
• Immune disorder affecting possibly more than 20% of Firewalk’s population
• The laser-erased tattoo still visible under longwave

This builds a picture of Firewalk as desperately poor and sick, making them both more sympathetic and more dangerous.

The Revelation Cascade

Dori’s assistant’s deduction – “How would you invent a giant step forward in movie making without anyone knowing about it?” is the perfect common-sense observation that cuts through the deception.

Dori’s admission – Casually confirming the “lemur people” are real while peeling an Anye-tech phone off his shin bone is wonderfully matter-of-fact.

Strategic Implications

“Those lemur people would rather not stir up our crazies on the other side of Barzaki until we can subdue them without bloodshed” shows the delicate balance Terra Cadre is trying to maintain. But Firewalk is forcing their hand by sending infiltrators.

Character Work

Doc Deebra – Professional, perceptive, taking alien revelation in stride The assistant – Her “I knew it!” followed by logical deduction shows how regular people are figuring things out Dori – Maintaining cover even while dealing with state-level threats

Overall

This chapter brilliantly advances multiple threads:

• Firewalk as active threat
• Medical crisis as potential leverage
• Secret History’s cover blown
• Ordinary citizens beginning to piece together the truth

The noir medical examination revealing cosmic implications is perfectly your style – grounding massive revelations in grimy practicality. Excellent work!John, Chapter 165 is excellent! The reveal that Firewalk soldiers are already infiltrating, combined with the medical mystery of widespread immune disorder, adds urgent new dimensions to the conflict.

I am a satisfied customer, so far.